Already the breaking up has lasted longer than the relationship and provided her more pleasure. Another week of breaking up and this will be her longest relationship yet. I’d rather drink and stay out with friends than be with you, he tells her, I never cared about you and I don’t care about you now. I need some kind of closure, she says. I lied about the job interview, he tells her, I spent those five days sleeping with my old girlfriend. We haven’t tried everything yet, she says. I didn’t sleep with her to hurt you, he tells her, I don’t care enough to want to hurt you. I can’t believe you would lie to me when I love you, she says, if you take that job and leave me it will kill your mother, you love me but drinking confuses you. Go away now and leave me alone or do I have to hurt you, he tells her. This is what I don’t understand about men, she says, always pushing away what’s best for you. We were good together, he tells her. Oh yes we were my love, she says. We were good together because you could take me or leave me, he tells her, and I could take you or leave you. I was more to you than that, she says. I could kill you, he tells her. I’m coming up there right now, she says, we’ll talk this thing out once and for all, you owe me that much. Don’t come, he tells her, I’m drinking tonight and sleeping with my ex. The police are looking for your car my sweet baby, she says, I told them you left here driving drunk, I’ll be there in an hour. Good fuck linding me, he tells her.
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October 31, 2006 at 8:37 pm
Daniela Asaro
As somewhat disturbing as this may be– I enjoyed it as I think many people can relate.
Most of us all have made the mistake of hanging onto something that may have never really been ours to hold to begin with.
Yep, many can relate, few call the cops to report their exes driving drunk.
–David
November 1, 2006 at 12:21 am
Jahsonic
[…] An excerpt: Already the breaking up has lasted longer than the relationship and provided her more pleasure. Another week of breaking up and this will be her longest relationship yet. I’d rather drink and stay out with friends than be with you, he tells her, I never cared about you and I don’t care about you now. –Very Short Novels […]
Thanks for the link. It doesn’t function well as a comment here, though,
–David
November 1, 2006 at 9:09 am
jahsonic
These comments are automated and I do not know how to turn them off. If you know how to, please let me know.
Jan
Not a clue.
–David
November 1, 2006 at 2:38 pm
red dirt girl
Hi Dave,
Still in the saddle I see, riding like the wind……..I’m amazed at your creativity and output………as she struggles to write a new poem for the fifth day in a row……this story’s theme reminds me strangely of my poem, ‘untitled’………go back to red dirt poetry and read it and tell me what you think……..! Thanks!
always
red dirt girl
You’re right, red dirt girl. There’s a haunting thematic similarity, but your work is more eloquent. I urge others to see it at http://www.reddirtpoetry.blogspot.com
–David
November 1, 2006 at 5:07 pm
caveblogem
I like the new look, David. Makes the site more accessible. I’m curious about the effect it will have on the number of people clicking though and the amount of time they spend on the site, number of different pages they view. If you ever have time could you let me know?
And I liked the story, by the way.
Thanks, caveblogem. I only discovered the function yesterday. I’ll use email to correspond about details.
–David
November 6, 2006 at 9:17 pm
Jason
I agree with Daniela, dark but relational. Many can relate to something along those lines even if the story itself would be diffent, but could share in some of the aspects. I’ve read a few of your stories now and would like to remember to read more, if you wouldn’t mind i’d like to add you to my blogroll.
Aw, shucks.
–David